andrea.
Talkative Toddler
[ss:Winter Ice]
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Post by andrea. on Apr 19, 2008 15:35:25 GMT -6
Corruption is the journey of Erin, Phoebe, Tanya, Leon and Lewis - five best friends with their own fears. They open the Earth into a new world, a new world that neither human or alien have ever opened before. It's the world between life and death. In doing so, they set loose a mad fragment of a man who wants nothing more than to die. But when trapped in this world, its not exactly easy to die. Living amongst electricity, his ability to affect computers, phones and televisions leads him to success, but will his efforts lead him to personal destruction instead?PG13 PROLOGUE - DEATH VIA LETTERCHAPTER ONE CHAPTER TWO - MODIFICATIONCHAPTER THREE - HIDDEN.Just as she goes to shout out in shock, the water begins to become even more violent. Streams of it is busting out of the surface and coiling around themselves to form some sort of rope in the air. A water rope. She stares in disbelief as this water rope begins to lengthen before exploding with a bang and falling limply back into the water again- with a splatter. It still isn’t calm, though, as it begins to twirl her around before the rope begins to form again, but this time there are many of them as they attach themselves around her ankles, wrists, waist and head. She screams but she has no strength. There is no sound.
And they are pulling. Slowly, but they are pulling. And she is panicking. Even more so when she is pulled deeper and deeper, until her shoulders is submerged in the ice cold water and then her neck, her mouth, her nose. Her head.Comments and critique yes?
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andrea.
Talkative Toddler
[ss:Winter Ice]
Posts: 11
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Post by andrea. on Jun 15, 2008 11:44:11 GMT -6
Updated with chapter two.
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andrea.
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[ss:Winter Ice]
Posts: 11
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Post by andrea. on Jul 18, 2008 21:31:46 GMT -6
Updated with chapter three!
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